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The reading introduces three advantages disadvantages[b1] of buzzers that can be taken to the customers, however, in the listening, the speaker agrees none of these three points, and he thinks the reading is misleading.
To begin with, buzzers will tell the truth to customers. The buzzers also are customers of the products that they think wellthink good and really enjoy. Therefore, companies will find the people who have used their products and actually reckon their products are great[b2] to be a buzzer. Thus, the buzzers will not tell lies to customers, even though they will be paid by companies. What the speaker says, undoubtedly, contradicts the point made in the reading that the buzzers will not tell the truth to customers.
Additionally, the speaker says that people will not totally believe them. Instead, they will ask them a lot of questions, for example, the prices, services and how long the buzzers have used, and if they cannot give good answers, people will not buy the products. The speaker"s statement, therefore, is a sharp contrast to the point made in the reading claiming that the customers will completely believe the buzzers and do not have critical thinking.
Finally, the speaker further explains that buzzersbuzzingwill not make people have less trust for each otherdestroy the civilization. Companies employ the buzzers just when their products are wonderfulworthyofpromotion, and if not, they cannot find the buzzerssince the buzzers have used their products and really think the products of companies are perfect, hencewhoareactually previouscustomers thinkinghighly of the products.As a result, if customers accept the products which the buzzers promote to them, and then they will have a good experience. Thus, they will beend up beingmore trustful and open to others. The reading, in contrast, indicates that the buzzers will cause crisis of confidence to people. The speaker, obviously, refutes the reading in that way.
[b1]这种观点句中的关键词要避免出错
[b2]appropriate合适的,convictive 有说服力的,cogent 令人信服的
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1)这篇综合写作比较简单,你写的也不错,信息摘取充分,表达也比较清晰。给你批改上一篇综合写作时说到的一个问题,分论点要独立,不要和后面的论据杂糅在一起,这一次做得很好,我标黄的三个分论点摘取地非常好非常清晰,要继续保持!
2)语言表达要更精进
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